1. "One of the things you must change is your personal view which I strongly disagree with." That makes it sound like there's no reason for him to act other than your personal opinion. Should he paint the White House pink because you say so, too?
2. There's a rule of thumb about using "I" in a professional letter: you're supposed to avoid it, because it breaks the etiquette between business and personal. You used it four times. Then again, professional letters don't start sentences with "and," skip commas and indentation, and read like a stoned rant, either.
3. There are zero ratings and zero reviews on your book at Amazon. MUAHAHAHAHA
2. There's a rule of thumb about using "I" in a professional letter: you're supposed to avoid it, because it breaks the etiquette between business and personal. You used it four times. Then again, professional letters don't start sentences with "and," skip commas and indentation, and read like a stoned rant, either.
3. There are zero ratings and zero reviews on your book at Amazon. MUAHAHAHAHA